(I attempt at haiku)
I pause from pithy
prose and my dry doggerel
to write bad haiku
——–
Ages pass it seems
until the one asks you how
you have felt lately
———
A jaundiced moon beamed
down on old 101
and she rode with me
———-
I watched her recede
and walk away out of sight
the sun was way harsh
———–
Mid happy chatter
I rise for a quick breath
of isolation
———–
Thought that burns right through
the fabric of a subject
like a cigarette
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ha, jaundiced indeed it was last night! Cute and playful haiku.
The last one is the best.
The prolific
blogger takes a
pregnant pause.
so natural at it
he needs not try hard
it comes from within
Thanks all.
I was going for the 5-7-5 syllable rule, which I understand from some more look-up, is not necessary.
“Thought that burns right through
the fabric of a subject
like a cigarette”
“Ashes of a mind
lay scattered
by uncertainty”
so much said in such easy manner! left me half way…was that the intention?
yes 🙂
nice, like it!
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“Empty your mind, be formless, shapeless – like water. Now you put water into a cup, it becomes the cup, you put water into a bottle, it becomes the bottle, you put it in a teapot, it becomes the teapot. Now water can flow or it can crash. Be water, my friend.” — Bruce Lee